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Post  Admin on Tue Jan 06, 2009 10:52 pm

Approved but she may have to take on human properties depending on the thread you put her in

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Re: Katana Isabella Valia

Post  Katana Valia on Tue Jan 06, 2009 9:34 pm

Okay, so I changed the things that you asked and I added some details about the Katoren race.
Let me know if I need to change anything.
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Re: Katana Isabella Valia

Post  Admin on Tue Jan 06, 2009 7:53 pm

The description makes her sound unrealistic. Just tone down the "beautifuls" and the "gorgeouses". Just give us a more basic description instead of something that sounds overpowered.

Narsasistic means you are full of yourself.

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Post  Katana Valia on Tue Jan 06, 2009 1:20 am

What about the description can I change.
Also i forgot what narsasistic means?
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Post  Admin on Mon Jan 05, 2009 7:12 pm

There area few changes you would have to make to this character in order for her to be able to be used on this site.
You cannot have an eternal age, she must have been born at some time and have aged through some years of life.
Also the character description is a little narsasistic...maybe tone that down a little, heh-heh.
The History is fine but you have a lot of information on there that is not needed.
Though we're going to need more details on the Katorean race. I'm not trying to make this difficult, but this is a race that not everyone can easily familiarize themselves with without a full description.
Fix those few things and Katana can play ^_^

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Katana Isabella Valia

Post  Katana Valia on Mon Jan 05, 2009 4:31 pm

Name:Katana Valia

Age: 223

Gender: female

Race: Katoren

Height: 5' 7" but 5' 9" in heels

Weight: 125lbs

Description: Katana has long flowing black hair. She also has marvlous gray eyes. She tends wear tight clothing 'cause she knows that she can pull it off and look good doing so. Most of the time she wears a skin tight, low cut black top with a skirt that comes to about mid-thigh and long socks that come to right above her knees with cute boots. When she not wearing that she tends to be wearing a short black dress that looks more like a t-shirt at the top and under that are a pair of short shorts with black converse high tops.

Weapons:carries a single katoren made blade

Armor: None

Strengths: Her skills such as her strength, speed, and agility along with her fight and persuasion skills.

Weaknesses: Her will to protect her friends and her daughter.

Personality: She is a good girl wiht a rough edge. She'll be as sweet as cherry pie as long as your nice to her. Make her angry, try to kill her, or try to kill one of her friends and she'll be your worst nightmare.

Philosophy toward Life: Kill or be killed.

History: Katana Valia was raised by Yokoshima. She was trained as an assassin. The brutal training her and her sister went under was what made Katana the top assassin on the surface and a target for many. She also meet Bryan and Victor Caryon, who were also trained as assassins. The four of them all worked for Yokoshima and Mister X. After a while, Katana talked to Bryan and he took her sister away from the life of an assassin. Katana continued to proform her assigns with the help of Victor. Eventually, Reiya Eneira joined their little assassin team. They were beaten when they screwed up and their other punishments were just as terrible if not more so. After putting up with being a political assassin for two long, Katana left that life. She fle dfrom there but continuely hunted by X and Yokoshima. They always wanted her back. She just wandered through the years, doign what she needed to survive. She even worked as a hired hitman for a while because she needed some money and she could kill without being caught. She also at one point had a relationship with Victor that never quite worked out. She has recently been seen in the company of her friends.

Martial Status: Single

Katoren race:
They basically look human in every way. Then tend to be skilled in combat. Also they have a spirit form. So, if the body they are born with dies they have the ability to leave the body. Then they may claim the body of a dying person which becomes exactly like their original body except they have the looks of the body. A Katoren can be drained entirely of blood and not be effected. The most effective way to kill a Katoren is to stab them through the heart with a Katoren made blade.


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